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When You Had The Chance...

Inspired by: [link]

One of my all time favorite songs.

This is kind of old and I feel it's a bit rushed. If you guys wanna give me some tips to improve it, I'd appreciate it. I hope you like what's here though.
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Interesting twists and turns. Maybe you want mental illness to come into play? Or... maybe not. It is your call.

Just have fun with it...

I mean use other words and not to be picky but at the end it is at his body not and his body.

Regardless... maybe don't make the changes of her moods so sudden like with the but one days. Explain more about that specific day and then have the suddenness of her mood swings.

So... yeah!

^_^